Overall, the class enjoyed the film, which I was extremely relieved about because I was worried that no one would understand what I made and the audience would be extremely confused.
The main things I had to change was stuff in the bathroom (which I have to re-film anyway), making the definition diegetic and making the ending less awkward to watch.
For the ending, I couldn't figure a way to incorporate a definition of the Hanahaki Disease anywhere, so I wrote it all out and stuck it in at the end. That did not go well with everyone! I thought that having it at the end would keep the audience in the dark for the entire film, but to put the definition in at coherent place, it would have to be somewhere in the middle.
The class suggested some ideas, that unfortunately would not work because of the restrictions I set for my film, and they had no idea on it so it's not their fault, but using their ideas I came up other ideas.
Autopsy report: The person suggested that at the end, after V dies, there is another character added who would give a verbal autopsy report.
Issues: The film is meant to be a story of just V and LI, so adding another character would break that whole idea completely. Now if I were to do a paper with the autopsy report, that means that would be (most likely) months after V has died. The way I would incorporate the paper would be the same time LI adds the flowers into the vase, which is right after V dies, so there's no way that paper would be available in a reasonable amount of time. Plus, the film has to end with the vase to tie it back in with the beginning. Logically, this can't be done.
Computer (looking up the definition): This suggestion involved using a computer to look up what the disease was, specifically when V is in the bathroom and LI is still in the room, but it could be at any point.
Issues: I had purposely removed an old idea that involved using technology to ensure that the characters aren't focused on anything else, other than each other. There's also the fact that if it was done at that moment (LI in the room), it would not make any sense considering LI has the disease and would know what's happening. If it was V looking up the disease, again she knows what is happening and it would not make any sense.
The other issue was the shots of LI walking in front of the vase. They stated that it was weird to watch considering all you see are her legs. I had positioned it like that to both show the vase in the middle and keep her identity a secret. I do agree with it being uncomfortable to watch and I will be re-filming it. Somewhere with a higher position to have it show her hair/ neck instead of somewhere lower.
For the bathroom scene, I was told that it was too long and LI is just no where to be seen for a minute. An idea I thought of was showing LI slowly walking up to the door, so intercut through some shots of V in the bathroom. Just showing LI being a bit more concerned about V, other than just at the door.
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